[med-svn] r13141 - trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe

[Mathieu Malaterre]

Author: malat
Date: 2013-03-05 10:41:40 +0000 (Tue, 05 Mar 2013)
New Revision: 13141

Modified:
   trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex
Log:
Rework some wording+typos

Modified: trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex
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--- trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex	2013-03-04 22:22:51 UTC (rev 13140)
+++ trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex	2013-03-05 10:41:40 UTC (rev 13141)
@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@
 Astonishingly the idea that customisation can be done perfectly {\em
 inside} Debian is not well known and the technical term {\em Debian Pure
 Blend} seems to be hidden well enough in the Debian universe that most
-people have failed perfectly to understand the concept.  There are no
+people have failed to perfectly understand the concept.  There are no
 separate repositories like PPAs or something like this -- a Debian Pure
 Blend (as the term pure implies) is Debian itself and if you have
 received Debian you have full \DebianMed included.  There are other
@@ -27,7 +27,7 @@
 Free Software that is useful for several tasks in medical care.  Because
 we do not restrict ourselves to pure practice management Debian now
 contains besides two practice management systems (GNUmed and
-FreeMedForms) way more other software useful in medical care.  The main
+FreeMedForms) way more other softwares useful in medical care.  The main
 fields to be mentioned are bioinformatics (next generation sequencing,
 phylogeny, etc.) and medical imaging.  We do also maintain a todo list
 of software that should be included as time and manpower permits.  For
@@ -65,14 +65,14 @@
 Once the \DebianMed idea is explained this way and people got the idea
 they usually start dreaming:  Oh, that's nice I could start to work on
 my medical tasks without needing to spend any money any more, wonderful.
-Well, that's a nice dream but we need to wake up you because we try to
+Well, that's a nice dream but we need to wake you up, because we try to
 be honest and do not want to trick you with false promises.  Yes, you
 get the software with no cost for the license to use and this for sure
-will effectively reduce your costs.  We also like to state that it is
-not only free of charge but high quality software which can be even be
+will effectively reduce your costs. We also like to state that it is
+not only free of charge but high quality software which can even be
 proven by showing the code.  We will not play dirty tricks with your
 data and we will not be the stumbling stone when it comes to porting
-your data from one to another system.
+your data from one system to another.
 
 However, the truth is that on one side health care and on the other side
 computer science are complex fields of work and you will barely find
@@ -103,12 +103,12 @@
 As you probably know Debian itself has a lot of derivatives (Ubuntu,
 Linux Mint, etc.) -- it is actually the most derived existing Linux
 distribution.  The advantage of working strictly inside Debian has the
-positive side effect that also all derivatives will profit from the work
+positive side effect that also all derivatives will benefit from the work
 of the \DebianMed team.  Sometimes there even exist strong connections
 to derivatives like 
 \printurl{http://nebc.nerc.ac.uk/tools/bio-linux/bio-linux-7-info}{BioLinux}
-which is in turn is an Ubuntu derivative
-but works closely together with \DebianMed to profit from our work via
+which in turn is an Ubuntu derivative
+but work closely together with \DebianMed to profit from our work via
 Ubuntu.
 
 % How do we work together
@@ -128,5 +128,5 @@
 
 Many thanks go to all contributors to Debian and \DebianMed,
 \emph{i.e.}, the providers of the packages, the developers of the Free
-Software and to all those who donate the resources for the project.
+Software and to all those who donate time and resources for the project.