[med-svn] r13171 - trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe

[Andreas Tille]

Author: tille
Date: 2013-03-11 14:07:26 +0000 (Mon, 11 Mar 2013)
New Revision: 13171

Modified:
   trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/debian-med-healthcafe.pdf
   trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex
Log:
Finally worked down the corrections of Wes Davidson <davidson at ling.ohio-state.edu>


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--- trunk/community/papers/13_healthcafe/paper-text.tex	2013-03-11 13:58:06 UTC (rev 13170)
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@@ -113,21 +113,20 @@
 money, and this where reality approaches, but does not attain, the
 fantasy of a cost-free medical IT system.
 
-Finally we can conclude: \DebianMed tries do be the fundament on which
-you can base a cheaper, more reliable and more flexible IT
-infrastructure for medical care by at the same time gaining independence
+In summary, \DebianMed strives to maintain the foundation on which
+you can build a cheaper, more reliable and more flexible IT
+infrastructure for medical care while at the same time gaining independence
 from proprietary companies.
 
-As you probably know Debian itself has a lot of derivatives (Ubuntu,
+As you probably know, there are many derivatives of Debian (Ubuntu,
 Linux Mint, etc.) -- it is actually the most derived existing Linux
-distribution.  The advantage of working strictly inside Debian has the
-positive side effect that also all derivatives will benefit from the work
-of the \DebianMed team.  Sometimes there even exist strong connections
-to derivatives like 
+distribution.  The advantage of working strictly within Debian has the
+positive side effect that all its derivatives profit from the work of
+the \DebianMed team as well.  For example, there even exist strong
+connections to derivatives like
 \printurl{http://nebc.nerc.ac.uk/tools/bio-linux/bio-linux-7-info}{BioLinux}
-which in turn is an Ubuntu derivative
-but work closely together with \DebianMed to profit from our work via
-Ubuntu.
+is an Ubuntu derivative which which in turn is an Ubuntu derivative work
+closely with \DebianMed to profit from our work via Ubuntu.
 
 % How do we work together