I'm the upstream developer of FreetuxTV.<br><br><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Wed, Dec 5, 2012 at 5:32 PM, Justin B Rye <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:jbr@edlug.org.uk" target="_blank">jbr@edlug.org.uk</a>></span> wrote:<br>
<blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex"><div class="im">Martin Eberhard Schauer wrote:<br>
> Dear Debian Multimedia Maintainers,<br>
><br>
> I think that there are some typos and potential for improvements in the<br>
> package description (1). (CCed l10n-english as it is a new package).<br>
><br>
> Current state:<br>
><br>
> Description: Internet television and radio player<br>
> FreetuxTV is a video player based on LibVLC allowing you to watch and record<br>
> TV on your PC. A large database (growing daily) of free WebTV/WebRadio/WebCam<br>
> channels in more than 20 languages is accessible. You can also play streams<br>
> from ISP television service if it provides this feature. Moreover, it is also<br>
> possible to easily program your recording on each channel with differents<br>
> transcoding formats.<br>
> .<br>
> The vlc package provides all multimedia codecs required by freetuxtv.<br>
<br>
</div>Yes, that's got a few non-nativisms.<br></blockquote><div><br><br>I'm not a native (and propably not a very good) English speakers. So
I'm not able to help you very much about the language rules to follow
or not. So I trust you.<br> </div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">
<div class="im"><br>
> I'm afraid the short description does not adhere to the Developer's reference,<br>
> section 6.2.2 (no need for capitalization). And a program does not allow<br>
> something.<br>
<br>
</div>There's no need for *extra* capitalisation just because of its status<br>
as a short description, but "the Internet" is widely considered to be<br>
a proper noun and therefore intrinsically capitalised. (To me this<br>
makes about as much sense as capitalising "the sky", but it seems to<br>
have become the standard rule.)<br>
<div class="im"><br>
> Please consider my proposal for a new description.<br>
><br>
> Description: internet television and radio player<br>
> FreetuxTV is a video player based on LibVLC enabling you to watch and record<br>
<br>
</div>Maybe I'm showing my age, but to me "video player" means a device you<br>
slot VHS cassettes into. Since you can apparently use this for radio<br>
shows too I would suggest "media player" (but I won't try to eliminate<br>
TV-centric terms in the rest of the description).<br>
<br>
Upstream seem to call it "libVLC" (when non-sentence-initial).<br>
<br>
I approve of stamping out useless uses of "allow", but I would suggest<br>
just simplifying down to<br>
<br>
FreetuxTV is a media player (based on libvlc) for watching and recording<br>
television on a PC.<br>
<br>
This phrasing also covers watching TV on a *friend's* PC (assuming the<br>
copyright police haven't declared that illegal). We might even<br>
consider using some term more general than "PC", but for now I haven't<br>
bothered.<br>
<div class="im"><br>
> TV on your PC. A (daily growing) large database of free WebTV/WebRadio/WebCam<br>
<br>
</div>"A large and growing database" ("daily" is a wild exaggeration).<br>
<div class="im"><br>
> channels in more than 20 languages is accessible. You can also play streams<br>
> from ISP television services if they provide this feature. Moreover, you can<br>
<br>
</div>"ISP television services" (and especially the "they" referring back to<br>
the ISP) doesn't quite work. The previous sentence was about what's<br>
accessible; we don't need to switch to second person when we can just<br>
carry on in the same way. Maybe:<br>
<br>
It gives access to a large and growing database of<br>
free WebTV, WebRadio, and WebCam channels in more than 20 languages,<br>
along with television services provided by ISPs to their subscribers.<br>
<br>
(Deliberately ambiguous about whether the IPTV services are in the<br>
database, since I don't know the answer.)<br></blockquote><div><br>In fact, the database is just an online database (another and related project) of URL link that maybe downloaded in FreetuxTV.<br><br></div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">
<div class="im"><br>
> also easily record each channel with different encoding formats.<br>
<br>
</div>"Moreover" plus "also" seems redundant. More importantly, is it<br>
saying that it can record them no matter whether they're in PAL or<br>
NTSC, or is it saying that if you've got 1000 TV channels it can<br>
easily arrange for each one to be recorded into a different format?<br>
<br>
I genuinely can't tell, so for now I'm just going to leave that bit<br>
out - we've already said it can record things.<br>
<div class="im"><br>
> .<br>
> The vlc package provides all multimedia codecs required by freetuxtv.<br>
<br>
</div>What's the point of telling me this when vlc is pulled in by a<br>
"Depends:"? The fact that FreetuxTV can use any media format<br>
supported by VLC is already implicit in the fact that it's "based on<br>
libVLC", isn't it? But maybe instead of dropping this line we should<br>
drop the earlier reference to libVLC, and do it like this:<br>
<div class="im"><br>
Description: Internet television and radio player<br>
</div> FreetuxTV is a media player for watching and recording television on a PC. It<br>
gives access to a large and growing database of free WebTV, WebRadio, and<br>
WebCam channels in more than 20 languages, along with television services<br>
provided by ISPs to their subscribers.<br>
.<br>
It relies on VLC for its multimedia codecs.<br>
<br>
(WhyTheName footnote: I suspect it wouldn't have got this name if<br>
there wasn't a French IPTV service called Freebox TV.)<br></blockquote><div><br>For me the patch, seems ok, I will check it with my co-Debian package maintainer and integrate it with the next upstream version.<br><br>
</div><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex">
<span class="HOEnZb"><font color="#888888">--<br>
JBR with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian<br>
sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package<br>
</font></span></blockquote></div><br>