[Debian-handbook-translators] proofreading of en-US/*.xml files and pushing

[AYANOKOUZI, Ryuunosuke]

Dear Raphael,

Thanks for reviewing and pushing.
I mainly agree with your opinion, but I have some comments.

> > I would like to push a commit of revising en-US/*.xml files.
> > But before do so, would you check on the commit[1]?
>
> I did review your commit and merged it after having applied some fixes:
> - apt -o DPkg::options::=
>   => we really need the final "::"

This type of mistake still remains on en-US/06_apt.xml.

> - it was really /etc/systemd/system/ssh.service that I meant, that's the
>   path to use to override /lib/systemd/system/ssh.service

So, It might be another mistake of
/etc/systemd/system/sshd.service (not ssh.service)?
It seems that no any package provides
/etc/systemd/system/ssh.service file.

> - SSL really stands for Secure Socket Layer (and not Sockets)

After some googling, I find both "Secure Sockets Layer"
and "Secure Socket Layer" are used even in IETF's RFC.
But it looks that recent documents use "Secure Sockets Layer (SSL)" expression
and that no RFCs use "Secure Socket Layer (SSL)" expression in title[2].
That is why I changed. What do you think of that?

[1] http://www.rfc-editor.org/search/rfc_search_detail.php?title=secure+socket+layer&abstract=abson&keywords=keyson&pubstatus%5B%5D=Any&pub_date_type=any
[2] http://www.rfc-editor.org/rfc-index.html

I don't intend to blame you, but I would like to know editing policy.

> - some formulation did not suit me, I changed them a bit more

I agree to all of the modifications.

Sincerely yours,
Ryuunosuke Ayanokouzi
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AYANOKOUZI, Ryuunosuke <i38w7i3 at yahoo.co.jp>
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