[Pkg-mozext-maintainers] Bug#719544: [xul-ext-firetray] "allowing [...] other features" in extended description

[Justin B Rye]

Filipus Klutiero wrote:
> As reported in #637830, the end of firetray's description ("and
> other features") is broken:
>
>> FireTray is a system tray extension for Icedove, Iceweasel, and alike,
>> allowing to set up a custom icon, hiding to tray instead of closing, display
>> the number of unread messages in mailing applications, and other features.
> 
> In fact, "and other features" must not be stray, but rather an
> incorrect phrasing. Having "more" there instead of "other features"
> would work.
> 
> By the way, "alike" and "similar" cannot always be used
> interchangeably. Oh, and there's a small mismatch (verb tenses). I
> suggest:
>
>> FireTray is a system tray extension for Icedove, Iceweasel and similar applications,
>> allowing to set up a custom icon, hide to tray instead of closing, display
>> the number of unread messages in mailing applications and more.

That re-breaks the ending.  But the reason I'm butting in here is to
say: this still has debian-l10n-english's #1 all-time favourite
giveaway of non-native-speaker English: "allow" without an object.
You can say "allowing users to set up an icon", or "allowing icon
setup", or even "allowing an icon be set up"; but "allowing to set
up" isn't allowed.

But wait, why are we ignoring the short description line?

>> Description: system tray extension for Icedove and Iceweasel alike applications

This is a bit wordy, and again misuses "alike".  But what other
applications like Icedove and Iceweasel is it talking about, anyway?
Shouldn't "like Iceweasel" include things like Chromium?  But no, it
doesn't mean superficially similar apps, it means related ones:
Icedove, Iceweasel, Iceape, and nothing else available in Debian
(though I suppose mentioning Firefox might make the name more
intelligible).

This also draws my attention back to "unread messages in mail
applications".  It means "in Icedove or Iceape Mail", right?  And
who's using Iceape Mail?  Just say "unread mails".

Here's my suggested revised version:

 Description: system tray extension for Iceweasel, Icedove, etc.
  FireTray is a system tray extension for Iceweasel and related
  applications. It supports setting up a custom icon, hiding to the tray
  instead of closing, displaying the number of unread mails, and more.

-- 
JBR	with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
	sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package
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